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When silence breaks the strongest noise.

Nothing spoken yet strongly felt,

Reminiscent of your voice.

Feedback and comments are much appreciated!
I intentionally left this poem open to interpretation, it has to provoke certain feelings/emotions.
Each reader might experience it differently.

1. Was it clear enough?
2. What did it bring to your mind?
3. Additional comments?
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1. Was it clear enough?

As clear as darkness that turns to light without a scream or a shout or a cry - merely a subtle whisper that keeps the starkness at bay for a little while.


2. What did it bring to your mind?

Inner turmoil, anguish, and sorrow for being existent.

3. Additional comments?

None in particular. I'm just gonna write a filler after reading this work:

My hands are cold from walking the rain, leaving me with nothing but a calming sense of ethereal naturalism adventurous towards the awkward aspect that keeps me smiling while laughing about life.
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ThatFunnierPiece Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
1. It's clear to me.

2. Of silence that surrounds uncomfortable truths, and tragedy one can't seem to affect. Silence is half respect, half weakness at this time.

3. I wish I was its sworn enemy. At times it kills.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you for taking your time to comment and answer the questions :).
And I couldn't agree more, silence can indeed kill.
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HametsuNoCharge Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
1. I think part of the appeal of the poem is that it ISN'T very clear. You could be talking about anyone in many different contexts and it would still work. It depends on who's reading.

2. A choking sort of silence, when there are so many things that need to be said at all the wrong times to a person that is not there anymore. Terrible, heartbreaking quiet....one that echoes of both fear and regret.

3. I love how you can weigh your words in such a way that give even short poems a lot of clout.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
1. Well, in a way it's clear that it's unclear :lol:?

2. Something very similar to what I originally intended with the poem.

3. :squee:
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HametsuNoCharge Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
1. hahaha true :)

2. Wow really? Yay!

3. :icongwompplz:
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animatrinity Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Professional Writer
waiting to speak, and the words don't come out. right as the wall crumbles. and you can't quite remember. but that new blue sight infront of you is so beautiful. you almost forgot what memory was.

godspeak coming in loud and clear. simplified words hold so much history, don't they. we had 'em the whole time, just had to rearrange 'em.

additional comments. hugs are understatements. (and salutes seem... elementary).
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
Interesting take on the poem my friend.
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BigA-nt Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I understand part of this - silence can be louder than words. Or have more impact. And I suppose people might think of my voice if I said nothing and saying nothing meant something. Interesting little verse. Nice work. :D
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
Thank you.
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Yagamiseven Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
interesting
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
Thank you :)
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shadee Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely clear enough.

For me it brought to mind what my interactions are like with people I get along with well and am particularly close to. There doesn't need to be constant conversation for there to be conversation or to convey the message that we enjoy spending time together. Sometimes just a look can say a thousand words. I'm most at ease and feel like I'm being myself around people like that.

People who are the opposite and give off an instant awkward vibe whenever the conversation drops for a few seconds take a lot of energy to be around for me hahah.

I don't exactly have additional comments but I am curious about what you had in mind when you wrote this. :)
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
Hmm a very interesting and positive way to interpret it,
Alas mine was a bit dark and depressing, the way a moment of silence can hurt more than anything, hearing the words resonating in your mind, perhaps the loss of someone close to you.. that silence where no words will ever again be spoken - the voice haunting you.
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shadee Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah that is quite a different meaning. Interesting how everyone can see something different in it, I like that.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
That was the entire idea of this poem, I kept it short and simple, open to interpretation.
I'm glad you found a more positive meaning behind it :).
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