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A very nicely written and composed poem with a clear story and distinct writing style.

1. I must say the formatting wasn’t exactly necessary, just use it to emphasize on some parts but don’t overdo it.
2. I’m very fond of this work and unlike *shehrozeameen I understood it perfectly and for once I actually can’t disagree more with my dear friend. This piece had a good story, a nice vision and had an incredibly agreeable flow. It’s clear and only needs 1 focused read for you to understand everything you’ve put in the poem.
3. It registered superbly, though at times the excessive formatting caused some turmoil.
4. I loved the overall poem but the part(s) that exceeds all others is in my opinion the second and the last stanza.

The reason why I gave you a 3 for technique is the excessive use of formatting.
The Artist thought this was FAIR
5 out of 5 deviants thought this was fair.

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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for the critique and I will consider all critiques I have regarding format. I am glad that you enjoyed the work :D I personally like the work and would never have formatted it had it not been the theme and I cannot write a work only for formatting :hmm:

Ah the second and last stanza :nod: thank you for your feedback! Oh and... well I you don't have to worry about it but I did request in the description to keep the formatting out of mind while critiquing ^^; still 4 is a score I consider really good :) I am a bit disappointed by Shehroze's score and not that I wanted a perfect one but perhaps an honest one :)

Thank you for the critique again ^^
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
To everyone their perspective, and to this work its just due.

Amen.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You... didn't get it... well everyone to their own perspective.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amen
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
As I said, for once I had to disagree with you.
It never happened before ^^;
No hard feelings - I hope?
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
None taken.

Different perspectives, different opinions, different points of view.

Hence, its all good. :)
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
Sweet :highfive:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet indeed.
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