The poem itself is an incredible tale of the fall of Lucifer and his affection towards Constance.
Though I’m left wanting to know more, who or what is Lucifer? Is he the angel that fell from grace? Or is he an heirloomwielder like some others in Vigillum? There is not a very clear distinction between who or what he truly is.
I especially liked the way Constance tried to comfort him and inevitably sacrifices herself for him as a way to cure him.
And this Lucifer is not a typical Satan, I applaud you for that.
The annex sheds the much needed light on why the poem is somehow abruptly ended here and there and how it is all connected.
The reason I gave you a 4 for vision is because I lack some extra information here and there, it's not that crystal clear to me.
And I fear the impact suffered under that as well. Though all by all 4.5/5 isn't bad right ?
thank you for the critique. I'm glad you liked it.
I made the necessary edit in the artist description. I hope that it helps.
He could possibly be an heirloom wielder but that is subject to an opinion held by the vast majority. The notable few (as mentioned in the annex) hold an opposing view regarding this.
But he has nothing to do with Satan. I've made that clear in the edited artist description.
I see, interesting. Will this eventually be added into the vigillum series or will it remain and independent poem?
It'll be added as an annex.
Invariably its going to have a huge backlog in the form of an annex. Captain Ulmar Wencesles Lockhart, the envelope of shadow, This poem, from the screams of free men the demon cried, for the king I will fight... plus the whole back-log of who and what and where and the map of the vestages series as a whole... its a huge annex I and *NotenSMSK are talking about.
It will be added, and I plan on doing so - at least for the second book.